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absolutely loved the realistic nakedness in the  narration... sincere and straight out of the heart- no coats, no artificial flavors, no philosophical overdoses.
glad  that you decided to write. write it off, manchee. just write it off.

Hey Samsara mucho kudos! I knew you had it in you. Took you this long to bring it out huh? Good going there buddy. Look forward to the rest of the narration.

filylyly, I'd love to read your works someday too.  Would love to put in a 3-4 letter word comment on it myself.

Amber, as always, mucho thanks!  The student is now working towards being a master himself.  hahahaha   BTW, will defn heed your advice you've given and I'm glad you've liked it so far.  Pointers from well-versed writers such as yourslef is highly appreciated ;)

Bhaley bro, been a while and its great to see you drop by and provide a feedback on this...I'll post the rest as soon as my creative juices starts flowing again.  BTW, anytime I could expect to see your next story coming up here??

No doubt the theme would be great. Your effervescence will definitely levitate the story. However, I see a manifestation of venegeance in your writing. Such thing peeking out metamorphoses into prejudice.

Great work. I am looking for the next part. Keep it rolling...

Good going Samsara. Didn't know you're a story-teller too. What a surprise

Waiting for the next part eagerly.

Bhakunde, Thanks man.  Am gald you're liking it.  However, prejudice?  No way.  Just telling the story how I felt it transpired and obviously adding a few of my own ideas to it.

Punte,  always good to see you man.  Thanks.  Below is the 2nd part.  Hope you like it.

 

 

 

Wow!! amazing read here ,samsara,, keep in coming...  

"darjeelingay jokes and some of the famous momo jokes .”  hmmm...

my shout out for the writer! story telling comes naturally and effortlessly to this writer. truly spontaneous, yes it is. once again, i loved the narration... very very engaging!!!
now, the reader in me wants you to reason, reason about these unresolved characters in your story. nature, genes, circumstances or brought up, what shaped up their psyche? what made this certain race psyched out? i wanna see philosophical side of samsara now. besides, readers would  definitely love to see your characters behind their tough exteriors, a softer subtle side of them. it exists, hoina? Or this particular reader is too demanding?
Occhey for sharing.

 Great going samsara and a great read.... you sure know how to have your way with the words.  Most of us if not all are not alien to this infamous Reggae Pub incident and I would love to see how you're gonna trailor the facts to suit your theory yet keeping the quintessence of the story intact.  You have picked up a good fodder to pen down an intriguing story and I believe you have done full justice to your story.  Would love to read more, keep 'em coming bro

Amber, thanks a mill and I'll do just that once I come up with the 3rd part...Need to get working on it when I finally make some time to get down to finish it.

Hey Geico, good to see you stop by.  Yeah, the incident did garner national headlines back then but if you feel some facts have been ignored, please feel free to comment, aight?  Thanks for the positive reinforcement.  And yeah, I got some driving points recently so my insurance premium would be going up for sure...You'd be able to help??  ;)

Enjoy Kanye's tribute to Big Brother...BTW, the song IS NOT the inspiration for this story...though it sounds real good!

"If you admire somebody you should go ahead and tell um,
People never get the flowers while they could still smell um"

hey samsara dont get mad........i was jus tryin to make u mad thats it.

i like ur story..............somewht sounds like some stories in Samrat Upadhyaya's Arresting God in  Kathmandu...   ( i dont mean u r plagarizing).....
good job......... .

Jazzzmine, thanks for the comment...I regret that I didn't see your post earlier.  Hope alls well.

Filylyly, Samrat Upadhyaya??  WTF?  Never heard or never read his works in my life.  Does he write as well as the Samsara does??  BTW, being an ardent follower of a benevolent dharma, I'm not mad about your previous comment.  Since the post was in English, maybe you had a hard time figuring out the plot/narration/dialogues.  I sincerely understand as it happens to the best of us (e.g: when I read lines in espanol).  Anyway, thanks for the latter comment.

Great One Samsara..Waiting for the rest!!

The first of its kind insight into a subculture that many of us don't know much about. Also kudos to you for telling it like it is. Very very vivid.

Sahayog bro, thanks for showing up here.  I thought we'd only cross paths at the basket-ball related threads.    Nice to have you come up and comment on this.

Nepalonmymind, am glad you liked it.  Thanks

The 3rd and final installment will be posted this week...Was too busy last week to even start on it as yet.  I sincerely regret the waiting game that has pursued ever since the 2nd part and hope to make it up to all who've been waiting.  BTW, 1611 views on this thread and only 17 replies so far??  I'd love to be showered with constructive criticisms if any along with the usual accolades...Just shows how much the silent majority runs things up in here.

you said 1611 views and 17 replies,,

  there are lots of people who're impressed by your article but forget to pass the comment on,, like myself . At first I thought it was just another thread, but when I saw people appreciating and wanting for more then I decided to print you work and check that out. It  is GOOD work man, I read this as my bed time story and I was like damn this man didn't finsh this work,, waiting for ur next chapter..

I don't care what other people say but U did good job bro

“Feri au hai bhai haru”...... “Ram, kati bhaat baki cha hera ta natra chittai euta thulo bhada feri pakaunu parla.”

“Khate haru khelnu nai aaudaina, ajhai mori haru le tali bajau dai cha.  Dekhaunu parla hami kasari khelchau bhanera.”  ....Good one

Good going samsara bro...waiting to read more

Samsara bro ..seems like you are damn busy huh.!!!......keeping us waiting for way too long...

what happened to your story samsara?? i really wanted to know what happens next!! even the first part is missing, Whats up??

where has it gone??? samsara....thinking of re-posting??